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My piece of art,Melissa :) you must be tired of me flirting with you all the time haha, just you are a fresh air, when i am so tired of reading my sad work, and someone elses cheesy verse...though these days I found MANY breath taking poems, however you always have a very special sprinkle!

The word choice is just simple, its how you place your words and achieve such incredible depth.

I love that you have a unique style to start your poems, always, like now you start by I told him, dreaming is good..
its very simple. but not for a poem, you make the reader appreciate being on your page, as if we are a part of whats going on and you are to go into details with us, which makes it very interesting.

However I really loved what he said lol :

the finest flecks have all gathered themselves
at my feet,
and I cannot fathom them leaving

^^
how CREATIVE, and how inspiring, and how thoughtprovoking, you brought an argument in yourr own poem, see ? this is how we know which poem is worth a front page! I read many breathtaking poems. but few are those who know how to play around with smart lines.

Oh, mon amour, vous revez comme un fou,
like a man who has found his reason
to sleep

^
now you started by pulling us into the convo, and at the end you bring up for us a french line, and I am a nosy person, god loves you that I know french very well LOL however they should all interpret the "revez" part, almost a mutual word.

Anyway, your last line made me smile, and say woaw :) well done, like a man who found his reason to sleep..I am not as good as you really, but I relate to how you write...that's why you are one of the few people who i give deep feedback to, makes me feel like its my zone!

five, better wins the weekly contest :)

This was so intensely intriguing Melissa! I feel like I am in another country sitting outside a fountain and I have just picked up this verse- don't know where it came from but it has such unique meaning that is beautiful language.

I've never read something like this- it is so creative and as sparks of its own.

Cheers!
MaryAnne

Beautiful :D 5/5

Yay!