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"Today, I surrendered to the wind
that carried a million whispers,
of those lost to be found, and those
found to be lost, in the arms of their
beloved."

^^^

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what do you expect me to say here ...???
what the hell?????
nominated the next week
for sure!

girl, you are developing fast VERY very fast!

As Nora said, I can touch great maturity within this piece.

What I liked the most is that the poem began with Today, and ended with..... Tomorrow!

Too much lovely, contradicting thoughts to handle!

I liked the sorrowful atmosphere!
FIVE

Your work is excellant, as always. You have developed a signature theme which involves determination, rejection of the strictures of the past and laying demands on yourself by yourself.

"Today the sun was rising with a bit of
shyness,"

^Dawning awareness - great simile.

"struggling in a midst of dark
clouds."

^Syntax issue: either 'struggling in the midst' or 'struggling amidst'

"Today, I surrendered to the wind
that carried a million whispers,
of those lost to be found, and those
found to be lost, in the arms of their
beloved."

At first I was put off by the prose style, thinking it should be in verses, but you have carried it out consistently, so I got used to it.

"my heart is beating, I'm still breathing,
but tired of hearing those deafening
echos inside me."

Interesting - echoes here are the signs of your own continued existence. I wonder if the deeper meaning is that you are about to shift your focus outward, ignoring the confinement of your safe abode.

"Today, I became an expatriate,
from everything that represents me."

And here it is, naturally flowing from the previous mystery into a new beginning, for rejection of the present is but creation of new futures.

Wonderful stuff.

Meme, I love your work, and I think you are a very creative person with a very great soul to be able to have the thought you do, I am a fan, seriously. Well done...

and waw :) I feel kind of as if i inspired this sadness inside of u llol, I love how i found myself in each single line, there was something magical in your poem meme, something very catchy that draws the readers within the hopelessnes in ur words..

Today the sun was rising with a bit of
shyness, struggling in the midst of dark
clouds. Its an omen of what is yet to
come, a journey of agony that is about
to begin.

^
this was very very sad,i felt as if strangled u know and as if the sun has no will to be up there, but again its a sign that ur not cheery for this day, and nnot optimist to welcome it either..
a vry gd start darling

Today, I surrendered to the wind
that carried a million whispers,
of those lost to be found, and those
found to be lost, in the arms of their
beloved.
^
a very very strong stanza, very creative and absolutely inspiring, it provoked endless thoughts and made me tthink of fate, of what we have no control over, and absolutely of how ironic life can be.. very emotional!

Today of all days, I felt so incomplete,
^ better say
Today out of all days, i felt so incomplete :)

anyway, i donu how much deeper u gna touch me!

there is something missing within me,
my heart is beating, I'm still breathing,
but tired of hearing those deafening
echos inside me.
^
my god, just like how the air last night made me feel, so tired of goin on with a heavy heart..
meme amazing <3

Today, I became an expatriate,
from everything that represents me.
I've given up to the weakness, that
suffocated my soul, until there was no
- Tomorrow.

^^
that lasst stanza was just a rocket, a firework in the mid of a dull night, and tho drenched in sadness, it brought a smile 2 my face, a breath to my silence and a sigh to my thoughts..

a master piece, a piece of art..the least 2 say

5.5 :)

Very good I loved it great everything deserves more than 5 but for now 5/5 :) :)

Today
you've branched into a new type of poetry
non-rhyming, and let me say, they are as good, if not better than your other work
i really sincerly do encourge you to keep on writing this way
absoultly powerful ya benti
5/5 and no doubt, a nomination if i could.
cheers

Very deep and amazing poem. that fill sadness in my heart once again. and my all pain and old memories refresh once again. i can find my inspiration in those memories before this that fades away once again..

amazing writing. i love it.

D poem Begins wiud HOPE.., carries u on a journey of thoughts risin widin, behind n beyond a persons mind.. n ends wid ...HOPE again.....;) luvly poem after a long tym 4rm u dear fren... keep it up...:)