This is interesting :) it's good :)

I love this

I agree with Kristian, this is interesting, very interesting, I got quite a few things from this poem, for example, with most poems, you tend to catch on with the whole situation right away, but with this one, I didn't. I mean I got the basic, I think, But it made me question how many people were in this, if it was just one person with maybe a split personality one minute saying "yeah, we can" and then saying "no, we can't" or maybe i'm just looking too far into it hehe, either way, I'm extremely impressed! Really well done, 5/5 xx

So much potential in your writing, like seriously :). Just needs a bit of polish but that takes time, i'll keep an eye on your work :)