Mmm, Well,
The flow was a little rocky, mainly I think because of the forced rhymes in the second stanza,
The rhyming scheme (If there was 1) needs a little work,
I myself would think free verse would work best with this.
The wording was a little too simple, but that can be worked on.

Overall though, I liked the title, and the sweetness of the poem,

Love,
Tara-Kay
xx