I think that the emotions in this poem are really strong and powerful but I think you should insert soem commas here and there in order to make the poem flow better. Though the rhyme seems forced sometimes the poem is good still. I hope you to not mind me critizising..

Thank you Jenny.. i will do as you have said and try to improve on them

This is another raw poem of yours.. I love these thoughts poured with so much passion..

FIVE :)

Thanx Abed..it had some glitches here and there but with advice from Jenni,i collected them

This was a very passionate poem. I liked reading and I love the way you ended it.

5/5

My dreams are getting me nowhere

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Me too.
Raw, yet emotional, good work.

You are so talented, love your poems, so full of emotion..great work. 5/5