Comments : Misleading world

  • 12 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Spirit within lay astray
    Endeavoring to perceive the light
    >in this part you describing yourself that you were lead in a wrong and dark way so that you are trying to turn into path and hoping you can see the light to give light into your life...wow...i like the way you write it..amazing!

    Hovering after the voices of deception
    A bliss,it seemed,at the time
    Realizing then the inevitable truth
    of the fallacious world and it's nefarious rules
    and then it seek for itself the path
    leading away from this land
    Towards the divine.
    >Wow..your poem is really great! In free verse of poem and i like it..the way you describe the path..it is emotional and expressive about life...i love the way you ended your piece,too..deep but meaningful...excellent!5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Marvellous

    Life was good, way back then as kids.. Older we grow, nearer the grave.. There's no time for merry at war.. I guess, this remains the ultimate truth within here.. Good job..