I like this piece, a lot. It is short, yet has a message and a unique style to it. There is no rhyme scheme to confuse or annoy the reader, yet there is a wonderful flow. The way you molded this piece was perfect. Your voice is present and your descriptions are clear. Fabulous job. This piece brings me to think, and I like that. There is a simple word choice, though it fits perfectly into this piece. You have penned something beautiful, excellent job. 5/5

Thank you so much!