Lonely Stars

Very good poem. I really liked it. The flow was ok but could be better.
One suggestion maybe try writing the poem like below:

"Lonely stars
Radiant till consumed
Dominating the sky.
Superior until beaten.

Left to solitude in space
Absorbing its own reason.
Lonely stars showing me their scars
Which they get once entering the darkness.

Darkness swindles and deceives us
Because we are dazzling and exquisite.
Lonely stars radiant till consumed
Dominating the sky.

Superior until beaten,
Left to solitude in space
Absorbing its own reason."

rated 5/5

Wow... really nice... i never thought u could turn those lines that way..!! really awsome
5.0 rating.. ``;D

Wow... really nice... i never thought u could turn those lines that way..!! really awsome
5.0 rating.. ``;D

Short but really good, I liked the repeat of the first lines at the end, although maybe adding some more lines between as when I read them again, I felt a sense of de ja vu.
Otherwise, The flow was great and wording beautiful.

Love Tara-Kay