Catch your feature.

by Poet on the Piano   Aug 24, 2011


Remnants of a glimpse
to leave my eyes
breathless....
violet irises
absorbing moon's tide
and signalling
the plural sounding
of your capture.

The air is pure,
solid and magnetic...
it helps me pass on
from what I let go,
without growling back.

I walk through your imprints,
whispering in fallen rain and
composed thunder,
realizing-

I've found a night,
where every pulse vibrates
the collapse of bones I've buried yesterday-
here you give me a feel
for an impelled, stirred land
distracting
all my envies.

I think, I may hold
a sketch of you-
before it becomes
background to ends
of light and tunnels.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Remnants of a glimpse
    to leave my eyes
    breathless....
    violet irises
    absorbing moon's tide
    and signalling
    the plural sounding
    of your capture.

    ^The wording here was immaculate, the imagery portrayed was vivid and the flow was great too, a great stanza

    I walk through your imprints,
    whispering in fallen rain and
    composed thunder,
    realizing-

    ^I loved this stanza, the shortness of this was what really caught my eye, the use of "whispering" here worked really well.

    I've found a night,
    where every pulse vibrates
    the collapse of bones I've buried yesterday-
    here you give me a feel
    for an impelled, stirred land
    distracting
    all my envies.

    ^Wow, breathtakingly sad, emotion seeped through this stanza!

    I think, I may hold
    a sketch of you-
    before it becomes
    background to ends
    of light and tunnels.

    ^Loved the ending, what a brilliantly penned stanza!

    The flow throughout was flawless, and the emotion was strong throughout and also the imagery portrayed was very vivid and well done.

    5/5

    Love
    Tara-Kay

  • 13 years ago

    by Decayed

    This poem is a bit surprising! I had to read it with all my senses to grasp the meaning you want to deliver! :)

    And you always make me ponder....