Candy-Coated Niceties

by Melissa   Aug 25, 2011


My retorts are bland,
like white rice
or some other undesirable food

yours are all doused in gooey saccharine
and decadent imagery,
mine have not the substance
to be as thick as your honey

they're overly prosy,
perhaps even, watered down colloquies,
with the way they ooze from each syllable,
never really sticking
to their worth

I crave syrup

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  • 13 years ago

    by Colm

    A nice write with a simple and effective metaphor. Probably most poets feel the same way at some stage or other. The only thing I would change I think is that I would leave out this line as it doesnt really add anything:
    'or some other undesirable food'

    Other than that though interesting read

  • 13 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    This was amazing :-) you took something simple and turned it into something enjoyable to read. What an imagination \. just an good all around poem

    Connie

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Salut for my favorite writer!
    right now am almost outdoors, when am back at night, on a regular laptop :P i WILL give you my boring comment and tell you how much i love this piece..just for the moment, u should now that,
    you rock.

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