Treading my pride

I think i agree with eveyone...i loved the poem it was nicely done :) 5/5

Connie: A sad story penned with lessons ..... very nice flow, choice of words and near perfect rhyming. I am certainly impressed.

I wonder if you rearrange the first 2 stanza's to match the thoughts in each, so they convey the same emotion, would it change the story in it?
So here is a slight re-arrangement of your words...tell me what you think:

Soaring with angels light as the air
moonbeams dance all around my hair.
The heart of a dreamer beats out time
lives in( ?within) a world of magical rhyme.

His love is (? was) perfect or so I thought
(but) all of (?his) stories were actually bought.
Open to hurt, confusion and pain
Yet moves forward with out restraint (?refrain - rhymes better with pain)

(I am not sure if it is the same thoughts being conveyed here ...so my apologies for interjecting my thoughts in your poem.
As always, love your work. 5/5

Soaring with angels light as the air
moonbeams dance all around my hair.
His love is perfect or so I thought
all of the stories were actually bought.

I love this part! Perfectly written and makes the reading really feel what you are trying to say here!

Broken and shattered , played like a game
for the moment all men are the same.
Try as you may you can't get me back
truth is something you seriously lack.

Wow, again, nice work! :) I loved it!

The first thing that strike me was the flow. It's smooth and rhymes unforced.
//Brush off the shoulders, standing up tall
wipe the tears forgetting it all..
// loved these lines... that's the way to live life :D
lovely write up

I love your words i dont think ive read a poem i dont like love it connie x