by MyaEve Aug 25, 2011
category :
Nature, environment /
nature
A faltering flower; |
by yogi73
Great imagery. I liked how smoothly it read. |
by MyaEve
Thank you much, love<3 |
by Mostafa
Well done My ! : 3 |
by MyaEve
Thank you, Cynnie. And ah, I see. I will(: |
by Saerelune
This is cute. :) The the sweet rhymes, short lines, and the fairytale-landscape. I am a bit undecided about your punctuation as it is a bit distracting, but on the other hand, if you take it away, things will read awkward. Hmm. Perhaps take each stanza's second and fourth line's capital letter away? So it eyes less heavy. |