by Jack Nightengale Aug 25, 2011
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
It was not what his mind was thinking, |
by BlueJay
Wow! This is amazing the introduction mysterious yet intreguing. The message is clear, consice, and very creative. Your word choice is amazing. There is a tiny bit of a flow but it is absent so much its hard to say that there was one. I think you have done a good job, though I see no reason to call it worthy of a 5. |
Your poem was not only dark but chilling in thoughts. Death isn't something we accept easily. |