Your writing is incredible I'm speechless.

Good poem. But I would break up the 1st and 2nd stanzas in to 2 smaller ones. Other then that the wording is good and easy to understand. I liked it.

5/5

Okay, This was difficult to read, and I'm saying this becuase I want to give an honest comment.
Try making the stanza's shorter, with less words in a line, would help with the flow because this is like reading a large paragraph of words, and the shear size drags you away from what is a brilliant piece.
This was dark, emotional, pure intelligence,
just take the sugestions on board and you'll have a masterpiece!

Love
Tara-Kay

Now looking at the changes, I think it is easier to read, yes.
I think that having the paragraphs do make this unique,
The changes do improve what was already a very good piece
Love
Tara-Kay

Thank you ^^,

Very nice :-) I loved this poem. I got lost in the words, like reading a good book. I will be reading more ..Take care