Counting Sheep (edited)

Your poem was not that good,but i also like it a little bit...

I donu what connie, dreamer and Marryanne are talking about, but I am so pleased that the sheep came back home!

Why sheep? The numbers kind of threw me off in a way. Seemed like more a nursery rhyme perhaps? Or a little humorous piece in a way. It was kind of hard to find interest in this, though you do make us curious. I'll take a look at your other pieces to see what else you have written.

Wow been there and the sheep counting doesn't work :-) In my mind I'm writing poetry .

I'm ok with the numbers and I think what was haunting you was the poetry running through your mind or am I wrong lol

I liked the concept of this.
Connie

The idea here is unique but I think you presented it with too much cliché...I suggest not actually using the numbers as it takes away from the structure and the content, what the reader wants to read!

If you do include numbers, maybe include them all together like this

[1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6....
dream keep producing
making me a victim
of their imagination}

....but tell the reader why you are haunted....what is making you think and all these dreams keep filling up your brain?

Keep writing.
MaryAnne