Light ( where should I put it)

by Brittany C   Aug 28, 2011


Darkness sweeps in to your soul
without your notice, corroding.
Changing you in frightening ways.

Friends are noticing, leaving.
Family sees it, shaking their heads.
Doing nothing, they just sit, watch.

Falling down a dark tunnel
slowly losing your fight against darkness.
It is blackening your heart, clogging it up.

Night is falling on your life, creeping up.
Wanting to end you, you want it to.
Suddenly the light starts shinning
Breaking the hold the darkness had.

A new friend, your star
Someone to believe in you is all you needed.
Slowly you become the person you were before
But never being truly the same.

It changed you forever, the darkness
But you are better for it
You'll never forget that.
Always thankful for your light.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    I liked so many lines in this write. It was really enjoyable. The ending line perfection

    good job
    Connie

  • 13 years ago

    by BlueJay

    This is so amazing!! You have a great flow, beautiful imagery, an excellent choice of words, and the most amazing meaning. Fantastic use of emotion.

    Night is falling on your life, creeping up.
    Wanting to end you, you want it to.
    Suddenly the light starts shinning
    Breaking the hold the darkness had.

    ^^^ Is my favorite stanza. It sticks out, and has the best use of imagery and emotion. I love it.

    Your beginning is strong and make the reader yearn to finish, and your end wraps the whole thing up so beautifully. This is deffinatly worthy of a 5/5.

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