This is so amazing!! You have a great flow, beautiful imagery, an excellent choice of words, and the most amazing meaning. Fantastic use of emotion.

Night is falling on your life, creeping up.
Wanting to end you, you want it to.
Suddenly the light starts shinning
Breaking the hold the darkness had.

^^^ Is my favorite stanza. It sticks out, and has the best use of imagery and emotion. I love it.

Your beginning is strong and make the reader yearn to finish, and your end wraps the whole thing up so beautifully. This is deffinatly worthy of a 5/5.

I liked so many lines in this write. It was really enjoyable. The ending line perfection

good job
Connie