I haven't a clue what this is about, yet it's still a beautiful poem that carries a deep emotional resonance.

I find the first stanza to be a bit clumsy, because the subject seems to be left out, whereas the last two stanzas flow effortlessly and have subjects and objects (in addition to beautiful language.)

Overall, this is very beautifully penned!

Sorry, I meant "predicate" not "object."

What I was trying to say is that the middle part of the first stanza seems to be lacking a subject, because the subject in the first part is the "air" and the "breezing wilderness" is the subject in the third part. What or who is traveling along an asphalt avenue of lights...?

Very beautiful. I love the imagery and the colors you penned. I'm a sucker for a color theme in poetry.

Connie

What a beautiful imagery ... really enjoyed reading it :)

This is interesting and very creative. The imagery is awesome, the theme is really cool. There us a flow and an amazing word choice. The author's voice is really very clear, and I think that this piece is excellent..

Yeah, this poem required a lot of thinking on my part. I love poems that require a lot of thinking sometimes because then you're searching for a deeper meaning that sometimes only few can find.

5/5

-Heather

Colm this poem is confusing. depth of this poem has turned into confusion and that simplicity us mortals search for is missing, nevertheless the colour and smells are uplifting and reassruing, i feel you got lost somewhere through the centre of this poem.