This is so sexy it makes me jealous. *uninterested face* M.

Wow.. This is breath taking! I like your use of words, excellent metaphores! You described this like liquid... that's what came into my mind when I was reading this. It's amazing that you feel this way and I'm really happy for you. Excellent piece : )

Danika
xxoxoxx

Wow! this poem took my breath away! I love the way you express yourself... I loved the description of the hands intertwined, it's such a simple gesture but filled with meaning and you've shown that with your words! I loved it.... amazing imagery. Great job!

This was sensual, breathtaking and tender. I enjoyed every line . You used words that tantalized and described perfectly what you were trying to convey. Just an awesome write

Connie

Chels,

You know it's amazing to see how much your writing changes when you are actually loving someone. I mean I know you can write a love piece with your eyes closed but the connection within this definitely shined through.

I adored your description within this, the hands are such a sexy image! one of the sexiest parts of the male body in my opinion and these ones sound gorgeous. =P I was really fond of the word choice with criss-crossed, it reminded me of something innocent, something sweet just like what you have here..

I wanted to say the last stanza was my favourite because of the description with legs being like braids, stunning, also the Egyptian sheets and the lilac scent.. however when I read back over this all of it really delighted my senses.

The only thing I want to kick you for is capitalizing each line! but i'm sure you will only kick me back haha.

Loved this one from you, another really strong poem. It's amazing to see your work develop over the years.

-Mel.

I'm with Mel.. this poem would be awesome in so many ways minus the darn capitalization! Lol. It really takes away from the softness of the poem, and it makes it feel super stuffy. I edited it in word and took out the capitalization in the beginning of each line, and it gave it a completely new theme and tone.

That ending was great, I love the imagery and sensations you brought to the piece. Hands are a very sensual thing to write about.. very nice :)

"Braided, like two pretzels"

^ I was not fussed on the above line as I felt you could have come up with something deeper and sweeter. Aside from not liking that one line I thought you had an excellent poem here. It was a lovely write that really captures the readers attention straight away

5/5

You know... most poems that don't rhyme I usually have a tuff time really liking. That is SOO not the case with this poem. I REALLY LIKED IT!
It got me thinking about my Girl, I'll tell you that much. Amazing piece... thank you for sharing it.

Randy

Such a great way to describe love. 5/5

Lovely.

I agree I am not fond of non-rhyming poems but I did like this one!

Simply magnificent...