Your composition

by Jenni   Sep 2, 2011


These smooth tones
are filling the room,
trying to damp this
dull ambiance and
coloring it.

Now I have to accompany
myself on the piano,
playing your composition.
I surrender as the melody
fills with spirit, you were
my white hope.

It's drizzling slightly,
maybe you are crying
with me.

For once I do not sing
because
there are no words
that would be worthy
to sufficiently glorify you.

Besides
I just want you to
devote yourself to
these feelings of yours.

A familiar breeze
enfolds me, caressing
your favorite beauty spot,
I feel secure and titillate
because of your presence.

Holding on to your
photograph, I thank you
for this experience as
the wind carries a
forget-me-not
through the window.

With the end
of this composition
I bid my final farewell.

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  • 13 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    Beautifully penned by an amazing poetess, Jenni.

    Your work always leaves me wanting more and some everlasting impressions with the emotion you fill every stanza with.

    5/5

    -Heather

  • 13 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Your writing is so eloquent and it genuinely moves me...this delicate character who is remembering her love, it was breathtaking when you described how she doesn't sing, because his composition is the only thing glorious enough. The emotion is so honest- I can feel the sorrow and the spirit of him that is living through this strong woman....there are no lies in this piece- because you devote yourself to your words and offer them as only a walk with the truth that this character is feeling in their heart....

    What a story- absolutely passionate dear.

    God bless- take care please!
    MaryAnne

  • 13 years ago

    by Decayed

    Jenni. Jenni. Dear Jenni..

    YOUR COMPOSITION is composed flawlessly.
    I can't find words to comment.
    I hope this could win!!! :)
    You really moved me with this sad write..

    HIGH FIVE ;)

  • 13 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Something I can relate to, does this poem speak of bidding farewell and break-ups? if so, then I got it. There are some touchy lines and original expressions.
    I loved the flow, your new style is getting much better, sweetheart. Keep writing like this :)

    Though, I found some cliches, especially in the first and forth stanzas, perhaps, you can manage to replace them with your original thoughts. Nevertheless, I can't say anything about the flow, for it was soft and it didn't break, at all, in no place, actually. And the emotions as well were something praiseworthy. :)

    "Now I have to accompany
    myself on the piano,
    playing your composition."

    -This is what I found much enjoyable in this write, I think this is really full of feelings. I felt someone 'denying' a farewell, as if it's not going to happen, and it just was beautifully sad.
    The ending was emotional as well, and the word choice was somehow clever and it all worked together. Good write, hope to read from you more soon. :)

  • 13 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    That was awesome jen i love the last stranza really well written amazing 5/5

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