The title is really creative, it has a simplicity to it but yet it pulled me in. I really enjoyed this read because of your choice of words and I think that it flows quite well. You definately portrayed a vivid image and managed to keep me captivated till the end. This is a well penned and meaningful poem.

Well I was loving the poem until the ending where it sounds like you're trying to drown yourself. ;)

I really appreciate your thoughtful words. The way you lay out the surroundings (butter yellow horizons, chlorinated-clear, baptismal pools).

This poem is an iceberg poem to me. So much on the surface, but much more if you look into the depth of the words. I've taken away a few different meanings here and there, and with that I'll just sit silently and ponder ;)