This is sweet, there is a tiny bit of a flow, there is okay word choice though to accomany the emotion it could be stronger. There is a ton of emotion and with the word choice and lack of description, imagery, or story it is a bit over powering. I really can't say that I like this piece, though I can't say that I don't either. Overall this piece, to me, is a stepping stone to greater and better works. I know you are very talented and kind at that, so I know with all of my heart that you can do a lot better then this. Though this deffinatly would make your friend feel loved.

Great poem :) 5/5