Madness

This piece is certainly inviting. Loved the flow. And the idea of struggle against agony taking a toll over ones conscience.

Really good idea... but just a few miniscule things i personally thought took away from the poem.

Scared to death, I run for my life
From these thoughts I have, invisible knifes

(knives)

Tormented and torn, I hide all my pain
From the world outside, trying in vain

This ghost within me, trying to get out

(attempting to get out? I think having the word "trying" two lines in a row screws up the flow)

Will finally conquer, I haven't a doubt

(Have not..... words like haven't and don't and can't always seem wrong in poetry... your trying to express words, not shorten them)

These dark feelings I have, I cannot hide

(also having Havn't and then cannot.... choose one or the other... either haven't and can't or have not and can not)

Are consuming me whole, eating me alive

really enjoyed it though:)

I really liked it. It was short but it had a lot to it. The wording was good and it flowed nicely. I see nothing that needs to be fixed.

gave it a 5/5

Great rhyme theme :-) though a short poem that I would have liked you to expand it was done well , dark and chilling..Sweet

Connie