I love this girl. Your words used so much imagery that you can actually see it happen! I'm guessing your camping trip inspired this<3.
Such a good poem
5/5

This is a very well written piece. I have enjoyed the simple notion that a spider bite could keep me so riveted and entertained. It tells quite a story indeed. very well written - bravo!

I like the piece and the flow of imagery and metaphor, including the real life essence! nice work =D

Aww this is amazing. It is so wonderfully written, and the emotion is so cleat.

Aww this is amazing. It is so wonderfully written, and the emotion is so clear. There is a lot of story in there. I think this.piece is extemely well written. Awesome job.

A very different write than your usual. Love the pain in the poem. The last lines are outstanding:

and finally the poison
reaching my heart,
with no final goodbyes.
I died
from nothing less
then a spider bite

I wonder if nothing "less" should be "more" to carry the metaphors meaning well.

Oh what a tragic death. Thank goodness you wrote this poem. Now all we have to do is find that spider and make it pay. ;)

Haha :D ur kool and that's funny,,yes let's find that mean spider ;) hehe