by Dave Sep 6, 2011
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
I'm tired of being the only one trying to make us work |
by Dawn
I think we all feel that way in a relationship at least once in our lifes...... I think you captured the exact wordings perfectly. I know I've felt that way off and on in my relationship. I just never knew how to express it and I think you just did that. |
by ibelievedhim
I love this one! It's simple but stunning. Good word choice and nice rhyme scheme. You're really good at taking your emotion/feelings and making something so beautiful that many people can relate to. (: 5/5 |
I could have presented this well written poem to my ex and it would have fit |
I liked this for many reasons, your rhyme theme was great, wording simple yet done with conviction. But most of all I liked the determination of making it right or moving on. I think we try too hard sometimes and in return only hurt ourselves.. Good job |
by No1ButMe
I really loved this. The flow was excellent this time and so much power in the words. It's also something very relatable. This piece is bound to go far. A very good poem. You have a talent, don't let anyone tell you different. Keep writing. I can't wait to see more. :) 5/5 |