I sometimes hesitate
the same way a mother bird would..
when she comes home to an
empty nest..
wondering where all
I work for went...

^^^
I believe this should be "worked":)

The ending just blew me away, Yaki.
Good write. :)

^^Btw, I'm Noura from my club account haha :P

"so comely." Should this be calmly? I'm not reading this right. lol

I love this poem, Yaki. So sad and touching! I really like the beginning, the sun 'desert'ing the sky. As if you knew heartbreak was going to happen someday, you just didn't expect the grief to overwhelm you as quickly as it did. Love the moon/soon bit, it had a nice play on lips.

I like the slight repetition of yet, I .... I thought that was important here. Also love your title, and how you have it repeated. I think it adds something extra to the poem that wouldn't have the same affect otherwise. :)