Wow! This is amazing! The message is so fantastic. The beginning is strong, the end just the same. There is a wonderful flow, and a beautiful word choice. Emotion is definatly present in this piece. I absolutely love this piece. It is so simple, yet beautiful. You describe what you want easily and quickly. You pull the reader in and slowly let them out. You have a great theme, and an even greater story. The length was perfect for the piece. Your own personal writing style came out very nicely in this piece. If this is not worthy of a 5/5 then almost nothing is. This is going on my favorites list, and I look forward to reading more of your work. Once again magnificent job!