This is good i like the words chosen and ryhmes well done i liked the ending hope yuh keep makin new poems :)

Wow this was very good and a very surpriseing ending. I though i knew where this was leading but in the end it was a big turn around i very much enjoyed reading this and very muches love love loved it :) :)
My favorite lines:
With my groggy looks and dagger bitten skin
gnarled arms i waded through consuming mist
my deadly cold pale legs flayed
as if its human strings were torn with rage
i could feel a stoop in my walk
as i saw twigs with bloody stalk

the entire poem was fantastic :) :) 10 stars
5/5

This shows you can write all types of poems & them be really good :).

You used good imagery, you can see whats happening & whats going on.
I loved it :)
great job
5/5

Great job i like how it makes you envision the avents as it plays out, I like it!! 5/5

Yeah this is good:) I really like some choice of words here keep it up

A good piece,just like the previous ones.
I especially liked the imagery you portrayed in this.
Keep up,this is nice.

I really loved the ending. I actually think, that this is a well written poem, but I agree to SpiritRising about the punctuation part. I like how you described everything really detailed, that painted a really vivid image, well done.

You have talent

Lovely poem!