Touch of Bitters

by Sunshine   Sep 13, 2011


Everybody left, I'm caught up here by my own
with bitter feelings biting down my tiniest bone,
as if it's lonesome with big black, sharp teeth
challenging my quiet inner nature to moan .

Or perhaps its discontent with shattered dreams
gone unfulfilled, beating the bottom of screams
that I can't leave behind, for waiting hurts so bad
but moving on is miles harder than it truly seems.

I guess it may be shame stabbing me in the heart
or pride failing to stand firm as I lose my art
of appearance when abandoned by people who
promised me a fine ending on our shady start.

Everybody left, I'm caught up here but all alone
with touches of bitterness yet stiffness of stone
for it may be lonesome, discontent or broken pride
but I swear I'd rather die before I age here by my own.

by: Rania Moallem

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title inspired by one of the members cinnamonspices and now known as " Touch of Bitters"

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  • 13 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is deeply touching and very well written

  • 13 years ago

    by Meme

    PERFECTION ACHIEVED !!

  • 13 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Rania Rania Rania what can I say you just rock girl :-)
    Nicely done, it seems by the comments quite quick as well LOL. Excellent

  • 13 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    FREE VERSE,RHYME...RANIA YOU ALWAYS ROCK IT ALL JEEZUS...

    THE FLOW WAS FLAWLESS...I MEAN FLAWLESS
    SO FLAWLESS IT COULD BE A SONG.

    jeesus,Rania..I don't know...what to say..
    you never prepare me emotionally for these kinda things..I am going to kill you!!!

    'tiniest bone"

    "die than age on my own'

    who even...

    rania,everyone knows you are amazing..
    but What I need you to do is acknowledge within yourself how good you are..

    I don't wanna hear you saying..

    things like

    "I thought it sucked"
    or so ever again...

    you are in my eyes one of the bestessssssttt
    one of my favorites<3

    I could never get enough of you and your poetry..

    NOMINATED!

  • 13 years ago

    by RSJ

    Hey, i think you out did yourself here
    truly poetic, the flow was incredible and the rhyming scheme was beyond an average normal poet, i really do believe that with the level of skill you posses, you should be publishing
    the image of sadness within these lines was very real, that I've felt it fully without having to even relate to it, and the repatison on your last santza served a huge purpose for me to grasp the full meaning of your tragedy.
    unbelievable,
    epic
    magnificent
    5/5
    Nomination
    and a weekly winner in my eyes.

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