570-455-9054 (Phone Number Syllable Poem)

by Nelmeser   Sep 13, 2011


*original form*

5 Dont waste your time on,
7 calling this old phone. No one
0 will
4 answer, no one
5 is home. All the life
5 is gone, and the phone
9 rings unheard. When you "Leave a message
0 at
5 the beep", do not say
4 a single word.

*better flowing version without the syllable formatting of the assignment :) [added 9/18]*

Dont waste your time on,
calling this old phone.
No one will answer,
no one is home.
All the life is gone,
and the phone rings unheard.
When you "Leave a message at the beep",
do not say a single word.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Omar

    Wow, this is so original. Great job and keep it up :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Decayed

    OMG!

    This is so original..
    !!

    I might try this ;)

  • 13 years ago

    by Something Diabolical

    Definatly orginal
    really enjoyed it

    to be honest i read it as your "better flowing version" first time round..
    they are both good

    5/5 from me

  • 13 years ago

    by BlueJay

    This is a really cool idea. I hope you see that even without a flow it is very nice. It is deffinatly creative. Awesome

  • 13 years ago

    by Nelmeser

    I know, it was an assignment for school and it had to be set up that way. but if you break it up where i have the commas instead of the lines for each number then it flows much better :) i just posted it in the original form.

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