My Sweet Revenge

Damn really deep and raw

Wow nice poem but you seem really hurt but you just knew how you describe that it is so honest true and sensetive bravo

This is a very good poem :) u wrote it beautifully and the title is perfect and fate will decide... Great poem :) :) 5/5

Hi Ash,

I'm certainly no expert here. I prefer poetry that is abstract and symbolic, rather than literal. If you want to talk about your heart and emotions, sometimes you can let those be represented by something else...such as a season, Springtime, typically represent youth/love in poetry, and winter death and sadness...

Just cleaning up your last poem...sometimes less (words) are more

You play with the heart that let you inside?
You made it cry bloody tears. Without looking back,
your cold indifference to a loving heart.

Honest fates want retribution,
hellfire will burn your fall.
Mercy itself laugh at your misery.

Never again will I cry.
Crumble to the ground, wallow in your sadness, your betrayal.
Pain is your comfort alone.

Or...

The cold let you inside, but you stole the warmth and let it spill out in your own bloody tears.
Heartache is beyond your bounds, but you have given mine.

The fates will turn cold and the retribution
will be that of the....and so on.

For me poetry uses symbolism and flowery/fruity language..don't be afraid to hang it out there...don't just tell me your hurt and pissed-off....who isn't...explain it to me poetically

This piece is something different from your side.Loved it.