You Lost Me (contest)

by Brittany C   Sep 15, 2011


Trust lost, eroded over time
Lies; deceit.
That's all I ever got.

Shame....

You embraced another
behind my back; in public.
Now you have lost me.

Pain...

It hurt at first; something fierce.
Felt like a hand
clutched my heart.

Like rain,

tears rolled, unchecked
down my sore red checks.

Sorrow,

in the darkness I moped, feeling sorry.
Anger enveloped me like a flame
bring me out of my
feeling sorry for myself trance.

What a pitta-full state I was in.

She didn't really want you
used you; I laughed so hard.

A smile touch me lips once again.

Then you had the nerve to come to me
You wanted me back!

I laughed in your face.

Sorry honey,
that only happens
in the senile dreams of a loser.
For I knew better then that.

Now content...

I'm over you
and your immature ways.
So you lost me; lost everything.
I don't feel sorry for you.

The truth...

You are not deserving
of my love; affections.

Nothing!

Love will find me.
My only hope for you,
is that you learned your lesson.

Now go cry
go cry to your mommy
for she's the only one that cares.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Faithless Watermelon

    My favorite thing about this poem was the little one-word segways you used. I also liked the erratic nature of it, it encapsulates how you feel and eliminates the need for a picture in the sense that it's an emotional journey that people can relate to.

  • 13 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    Your talents are showing in this piece lol Loved it can't think of a thing that I would change Excellent

    Connie

  • 13 years ago

    by WTMNIS

    You are amazing..
    why?

    because your poetry is amazing
    your soul is amazing
    and your words always make me feel inspired...

    I liked this write by you, sweets...I truly liked it though it is simple and perhaps...'plain' but I LOVED the emotions, and the confusions between the stanzas...you began it with sadness and ended it with confidence it just made me feel moved. :)

    anyways, the last line wasn't that poetic....I'd suggest that you might change it into something more poetical or...I don't know it's just not poetic this way.

    the title however fits the content of the poem. I love this song by christina and you made it even better in my eyes by writing such a piece.

    Very well-written.

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