Comments : Knowing

  • 13 years ago

    by average thoughts

    I loved this one..5 frm me..dear..

  • 13 years ago

    by lOsT sOuL

    Wow... now you are making me speechless... your poems are sparkling in my eyes..:) it's just awsome....:) if you will change some of the words in it .. it will be beyond limitation in poetry....:)
    ^^
    Do i know me?
    Do you know me?
    I'm scared for you to know me,
    i am hiding from everyone
    and i think too much.

    In this stanza if you start with a question to urself .. that would been awsome.. and little bit change in I am hiding instead ot I hide....
    ^^
    I'm scared for everyone to know me
    it's how i get hurt
    but it's better than being alone.
    I don't care
    i search for people,
    people only i can trust.
    Right now i have one
    and that's my best friend.

    this stanza is perfect but a slight change in here "i am looking for someone whom i can trust... "

    That's it ..:) everything is perfect ..:) it's a strong and great poem..:):) 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    "A rose
    basking in the sunset,
    colors so fine
    gleaming with a shine.
    Sunlight
    and moonlight"

    The chosen words here are so nicely set in this interesting poem, they seem to be out of a love poem or a nature poem adding an exquisite quality to the verses. I am always surprised how well some poets use certain words.

    A little variation in use is presented here :

    A rose
    basking in the sunset,
    colors so dazzling
    radiant
    in the sunlight and
    luminous
    in the moonlight