4 Minutes & 30 Seconds

by Melpomene   Sep 20, 2011


I had

every intention of
writing you a sonnet tonight,
a love poem that would
burn you an eternal flame with
my metaphors.. to blush his
raised cheek bones and
twirl your stomach with butterflies
no, moths. For butterflies
were too cliche.

but then I thought, why
write to you my deepest thoughts
in symbolism, words that would
only be re-used, abused and
have no real meaning anyway.

and so this is what it has come to,
a mere poem that is .. nothing.
Nothing but my thoughts on paper,
that took 230 seconds, one
headache, and a bitterness
that would - never -
bloom you a bouquet of
Russian roses.

I am,
sorry dear.
But it seems they too
love a lady beetle anyway.

--More thoughts than anything. Written for a writing exercise, write a poem under 5 minutes..

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  • 12 years ago

    by Natusha

    This felt so sincere, this was written not to lavishly dance with words(which some of your poems that I saw do) but to state, serenely, that beyond poetry, beyond cleverly & genially made metaphors there are honest words and clever simplistic yet enthralling writing.

  • 12 years ago

    by Natusha

    This felt so sincere, this was written not to lavishly dance with words(which some of your poems that I saw do) but to state, serenely, that beyond poetry, beyond cleverly & genially made metaphors there are honest words and clever simplistic yet enthralling writing.

  • 13 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Here for read # 42596516996156

  • 13 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    If this was indeed done in 5 mins you are shear genius. I loved every word of it. I work so hard to write something worth while and so envious of ppl like you where talent is abundant lol

    Just an awesome job
    Connie

  • 13 years ago

    by Saerelune

    This is certainly something new from you ... remembering that you took months over your October poem (if I remember correctly). I feel like, in these 4 minutes and 30 seconds, you've compiled your whole poetic oeuvre. The moths, the flowers, the lady beetle, you mentioning your symbolism and metaphors ... Every bit of this poem kind of gives us hints on your writing style. I loved the way you took it all so light-heartedly. The narrator seems to be at ease here, which contrasts so much with your other works, which often have a heavier (more serious) tone. I truly enjoyed this Melosaurus-like poem. =p

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