Comments : Treasured Lace

  • 13 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Connie what a wonderful way to described the formation of a friendship and a friendship is delicate like lace, something we have to handle with care. Well done.

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenni

    Like fine lace
    friendships are woven
    starting from a single thread.
    It's beginning
    is looped
    twisted
    and braided into a
    delicate pattern of
    spaces.

    ^ I think "It's beginning" should be "Its beginning", you might want to insert a comma after "looped" and remove the space between the last word and the full stop, it's irritating. I mean it underlines the word, but oh well.. haha :P
    I really like the comparison and the idea behind this because it's actually quite similar, since you may continue braiding it, which will strengthen the thread. A friendship will also keep growing if you take good care of it, but people need their freedom anyway. When things get tough you know the bond might undergo specific stresses and strains, but it would never tear.

    Each design
    is an original
    morphing of personalities
    some woven with
    gold or
    silver
    threads
    yet blending into
    a lasting work
    of art

    ^ Insert a fullstop at the end of this stanza.
    This stanza is what I call original, I love the idea behind this because it's true. No friendship is like another and you showed that with these few words. They definately contain a lot of meaning and are very powerful. I think it tells a lot about you, that you think, that every friendship will last regardless of who is "building" it or it at least shows that you believe a true friendship is meant to last and it does not matter how different two people may be.

    As the fabric changes
    shape, so do the times
    shared in friendship
    tears
    joy
    hand holding secrets
    engage an eternal treasure
    crafted by love
    kindness
    and trust.

    ^ This stanza seems to lack punctuation, which makes understanding it a bit tough.
    You added another foundation a friendship needs and that is the fact that you're able to rely on each other whenever. I also like how you developed this poem more into the friendship direction.

    Moments
    draped tightly
    in memories
    long protected
    tenaciously
    against time
    guarded by
    tender hearts

    ^ Now this sums it all up very well. I love this ending because the feelings are so pure and honest.
    Overall I really loved this poem because the emotions are really strong and I like the flow of it. I know this is different from what you usually write, but it's as good as your previous poems if not better. :)

  • 13 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I enjoyed the comparison to friendship and lace. You penned it perfectly for it's always morphing and patterns are created. This should be nominated as one of the best friendship poems I have read.

  • 13 years ago

    by Captain Lonesome

    This is so true and has such a wonderful comforting feel about it!! Excellent poem my favorite part is
    crafted by love
    kindness
    and trust.
    Great job!! :-)

  • 13 years ago

    by Hallucinostic

    What a wonderful way of describing friendship. I can tell this comes from the heart, well, not literally from the heart, cause this will be bloody and all, lol, anyways, what I wanna say is that, this is one very honest poem, no pretense, like I said, I can tell cause Im your friend and the way you show me friendship is like the way you wrote this poem, beautifully. :D

  • 13 years ago

    by HiddenFromView

    So touching and so true. well spoken Connie. i can see your heart in this one and its worth looking at. Nicely done.

  • 13 years ago

    by Liquid Grace

    This is a refreshing poem by far. Amongst all the 'love' and sad poems it's truly refreshing to see this aspect of life recognized. Friends make up such an integral part of our lives. Friends help us grow as we help them on their journey as well. The diversity that is friendship how we all come together to complete eachothers puzzle or in this case my all time favorite 'friendship bracelet'. When I read this poem I remembered days of Highschool when we'd all make those friendship bracelets and the deep meaning behind each strand. Thank you for bringing me back there.

    This poem was a perfect portrayal of what friendship is. What it means to be friends, how it's meaning is far more deeper then just a word. Truly a breath of fresh air, I honestly wouldn't change a thing.

  • 13 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    And so Connie, I could see this one coming.....now that you have gathered a whole team of PnQ friends. I also see the efforts you made when reaching out and touching all our hearts. So here is a tribute I wrote (originally for someone else), but now it is yours as well, significantly reworded, so it is exclusively for you to treasure:

    A beautiful treatise to your friends well woven
    a toast to friendship, so well sung
    with delicate braids so well spun
    may your friendship last many suns
    through thick and thin we love you hun!

    Thank you for your kind words for all of us.
    Nominated with luv by your older friend.

  • 13 years ago

    by Chevalier des Fleurs

    This is such an original and unique poem full of love and charm. It blossoms word to word, line to line into a masterful piece which describes what friendship truly is. It is very enchanting and really elegant and a wonderment in itself. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Exostosis

    Such a heart warming piece. It is true that bonds of friendship are delicate but, they are worth the maintenance they require <3

  • 13 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Wow, Connie
    What a unique and creative way to express the bonds of friendship.
    This was so sweet, I could really relate to the words, as my best friend and I have shared some great times, and have this special bond in which you describe so well.

    This was breathtakingly beautiful.
    Love
    Tara-Kay
    xxxx

  • 13 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Friendship is indeed a treasure that lasts for
    a lifetime and I like the comparison you made
    here with a lace. Each stanza brought out the
    nurturing and growth of a friendship. Well
    penned!

  • 13 years ago

    by average thoughts

    Wow,,one of ur best ,,pleasure to hv friend like u ..5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by NightFlyer

    Haven't heard of friendship compared to woven lace but you have achieved this wonderfully in your poem. Very well done.

  • 13 years ago

    by nouriguess

    I am really sorry I am late!

    This write was perfect! Connie, all friendship poems are true yet they are rubbish sometimes Lol but this one was seriously seriously a front page material! if only I had one more vote, I would nominate this in no time!

    Well done....friend. :)

  • 13 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow! This is the best friendship poem I have ever read... I loved it... I was captivated from the first line until the very end. I loved how you compared eternal friendships to woven lace, or some kind of fabric that lasts a lifetime. It was a very beautiful comparison and I loved the imagery you created. I also loved the structure and flow, it was just lovely !
    The last stanza was a beautiful ending:

    "Moments
    draped tightly
    in memories
    tenaciously
    protected
    against time
    guarded by
    tender hearts."

    --Amazing! Definitely worth a nomination!

  • 13 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Very Nice Penned, True Words!!!

  • 13 years ago

    by yogi73

    What a warm and charming poem

    hand holding secrets
    engage an eternal treasure
    crafted by love
    kindness
    and trust.

    priceless

  • 13 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    NOMINATION!!! By far one of the best friendship poems ive ever read the idea was unique and beautiful. ... You are so talented. .. A gift from heaven. .. Amazing truly amazing xxx

    tony
    xxxxx

  • 13 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    NOMINATION!!! By far one of the best friendship poems ive ever read the idea was unique and beautiful. ... You are so talented. .. A gift from heaven. .. Amazing truly amazing xxx

    tony
    xxxxx