Oh my gosh!! When you asked me to look at this piece, I never imagined it would be this Freaking amazing!!! The imagery and emotion are dead on. The author's voice is so strong in this, it is beautifully intergrated. There is a fantastic flow that is accompenied with an immaculate word choice! Story is important in this type of poetry and you nailed it! I absolutely love this piece. It starts off so strong and it only grows stronger with each line. This piece really speaks to me, and one of the things it just screams is that it came from your heart; which is the best place for poetry to originate. Other then a few simple grammar mistakes then this piece is perfect! If this is not worthy of a 5/5 then please do tell me, what is?

Wow. This is very....I don't even know how to describe it. It just, has so much emotion. It reminds me of a time in my life when I had to deal with something similar to this. Its amazing that you can write something like this with so much emotion and still have a flow and rythm to it. Its truly amazing :) 5/5

Now I absolutely had to say this, I think that this piece is exceptionally good.
I love the wording, and the imagery was so damn real, I could see everything, I loved the way it flowed so well, and the choice of wording was so creative.
Im pretty speechless and that doesnt happen to me much, I have to say.

The only thing I'd say is... Don't capitalise the first words of each line, just ruins the flow and isn't easy on the eyes. A mistake I used to make all the time.

Loved it
love
Tara
xxx

I second Tara Kay.
It was very well done, forcing me to give out my first ever 5/5 x_x

I absolutely loved the way the words were superfluous. There was never a need to explain the feelings that were trapped in the words. By simply reading them, they appeared on their own.

The concluding stanza - alone - is also very well deserving ^-^
I look forward to your future works.