by Salina Is Beautiful Sep 29, 2011
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
I wish you were here |
by Lostlove1
Lots of emotion here Salina (?) but I would start with capital I's and theres way too many of them-try to eliminate some and breaking the poem up some where so the reader has a little more time to let the thoughts sink in. Enjoyed reading you. Take care |
This is really heart wrenching, you penned strong emotion of loss. Good luck to you and your poem was a cry for reconciliation |