Comments : Touch Down

  • 13 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    Nominating this poem(:.

    I can relate to this.
    The one thing i would change is this

    I tried to deny this fact,
    I kept closed up and cold,
    The only things I said to you,
    Were harsh and sharp and bold.

    to

    I tried to deny this fact,
    I kept closed up and cold,
    The only things I said to you,
    Were harsh, sharp and bold.
    -easier read :)

    The poem flowed perfectly. It kept drawing you in reading more. How scared you were & how much you tried to fight it off poured out. When in the end you couldn't resist.

    Amazing Job(:
    5/5