I have to agree with SpiritRising on this one. I don't have to try and figure out or understand what the metaphor is and means. LOL It did bring smiles to me. Flow is good and rhyme is right on. Good work. LOL

Lol, I agree, you're a genius, haha. You are able to write about a variety of topics heck no, I say about everything that may or may not be exciting to you in a very artistic and thoughtful way.

I love vinaigrette dressing, but wait a minute, vinaigrette dreams, awww, that doesnt sound too tasteful, unsweetened, defeated dreams.

To me, those metaphors are about life's transitions and "What are they saying?
What does it all mean?" phrase is about evaluating life.

Very creatively done, as always!

A very imaginatiive and amusing poem, TJ!

This is a amazing poem i loved it alll and it was very good just great and fantastic...i loved how u did this poem and it was worded really goood it's a mix of things
and to be honest somewhat sad for me but i still loved it and it had awesome fairytale,nature things that i just absolutely llloooovvveeee :) :) very awesome koolness mr talented poet :) 100/100

This was mind blowing, haha simply because I have had those same thoughts, read and re-read a poem and never get it. Sometimes I ask other times I feel dumb because everyone else gets it lol

Hark, and I run into an impeccable piece. I enjoy the vividity portrayed and the vague connections of words with entities, metaphors of course. You sir, are good with words. Hands down.

WONDERFUL TJ... :) Love your way with words and how they always bring a smile :)

"marshmallow clouds" ~ dont they just look like that? :)) Yum, HeHe.

A lovely up beat poem, TJ. This had me remembering old musicals from my childhood days. They don't make them like that anymore, lol.

I see a whole different person in this poem, I like the happiness that radiates from your words.

Angel hair pasta
vinaigrette dreams
lemon drop skies
where unicorns scream

^^
What an imagination:)

Well done:)

5/5 Ingrid

Lol, hahaha, this is supposed to be funny, believe me :P

I would say this is the funniest, most metaphorically riddled, amazing poem of the week that I have read. A very talented write. Your pen runs the readers imagination wild in all directions. In my eyes this is a winner.

I wasn't quite sure what to think when the first stanza starts with the words angel hair pasta. I was pleasantly surprised to find a really good poem as I moved through it. I liked how upbeat and imaginative it was. None of the same old metaphors and words that have been overused and worn out. It was funny, as well as holding more meaning than just a collection of odd metaphors. I thought the flow and rhyming were well done. I don't usually I'm glad I did. Thank you for expanding my horizons with this piece.

Why didn't I come across this earlier?

I can only agree with all the comments above and it was a more than enjoyable read.
Your choice of words and how you managed to convey this message with unique and somehow entertaining metaphors is just stunning. I definately loved the fact that this poem flows smoothly and rhymes too! I haven't read this kind of poems in quite a while; poems with original rhymes, smooth flow, brilliant wording AND a great message.

This is absolutely brilliant, no doubt.

Well they have said it all so there is nothing much for me to say except for thanks for another excellent read..liked it.

Nice rhyming piece..a nice little jingle

Aww wow I loved this! I loved the imagery you created through your words... and I must say nice choice of food! yummy! But really nicely written, I enjoyed it very much. Well done =D

I'm giggling so hard... That was pretty funny, dear.

5/5

-Heather