by WonderingSpiritDiaries Oct 4, 2011
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
Coming through the dark, |
by BlueJay
I really like this piece but I think it would fit better in the nature section of poems. Also, the last line feels a little off because in being at the end of the second line kinda throws off the flow. I love the first line and everything up til in about the second. Just the end feels so off. (sorry if I am repeating myself, I'm just trying to think of suggestions to fix it.... maybe try |