I really like this piece but I think it would fit better in the nature section of poems. Also, the last line feels a little off because in being at the end of the second line kinda throws off the flow. I love the first line and everything up til in about the second. Just the end feels so off. (sorry if I am repeating myself, I'm just trying to think of suggestions to fix it.... maybe try

Coming through the dark,
with shining rays that creeping
through early morning

or something like that? It's just that I love the idea and I don't see why no one else has commented because other than the flow it is perfectly wonderful.

Lovely write.