You did it again my friend...the constant mood, the erratic rhyme and rythm adds up to the impact of the emotions you are trying to tell your reader. i really love your words.
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Wow, very well written, It is full of beautiful imagery and you executed each sentence with the utmost vivid and creative structure I have seen in a long while. Awesome work. Thank you for the comment on mine. Great message throughout this poem as-well, I loved it! 5/5