You Came To Me In My Dream

Thank you!

Jenni said it all hahaha:) I love it a 5 from me:)

Thank you for the feedback. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, coming up with the title was one of the hardest parts for me. I'll be sure to to of something more clever for it.

Thanks again!

First of all I recommend you to think about a different title because this isn't that eye-catching, it fits to the poem and gives the reader an idea what to expect, but it's a bit too simple. I have to admit that I can't really come up with something better right now either.

I slept upon a world of darkness,
which seemed to last an eternity.
My eyes gazed above,
which I saw an light that seemed heavenly.

^ Two suggestions: I think "which" in the last verse should be "where" and exchange "an" with "a"
I think this is a good introductory stanza because it portrays an image, which makes this poem vivid. I also like the contrast of darkness and light, while the darkness might represent the past the light will show a brighter future or hope at least.

I began to fall in my dreams,
As if it's all that Satan brings.
That Heavenly light I gazed upon,
Began to take the shape of wings.

^ I like the idea behind this, how the speaker doesn't seem to be able to let go of the darkness, but will rather be captivated by and in it, while what's above doesn't just watch, but shape wings with which it might end up saving the speaker.
This stanza definately increases the suspense and I was really curious to figure how it continues.

I slowly began to feel hate,
As my soul could no longer wait.
An angel had appeared above me,
For she'd determined my fate.

^ I like how you decided to point on the problems once more before actually telling the conclusion. The speaker is obviously in a discrepance with himself. Will he either give up hope or not let go just yet and hold on to what's there still? Yet he doesn't believe it's his choice anyway.

I had open my eyes and saw a dove,
Could this have been an gift from the angel above?
She only came to me in my dreams,
For that angel I saw feared true love.

^ The image of the dove as been used very clever here, especially since it symbolises hope and freedom. This doesn't feel like a complete happy ending, yet it does have a touch of it. I like the fact that you left it a bit open.

Overall I think this is a quite well written poem, which needs a little editing. The flow was alright and I think that the feelings are powerful.