The Great Divide

I think that though there were some as you have been saying "cheesy lines" it was a very nice write. It had a purpose and it kept me wanting to read, unlike many of the pieces I have read lately. I think that word choice is crucial in poetry, and the word choice here is very calm and it sets a nice tone for the piece. emotion in this piece is oozing out, and that is a thumbs up type of skill, so magnificent job there. All in all I would have to say this piece is amazing, however I believe it is not fully worthy of a 5/5. In stead I am giving it a 4, in hopes you will understand that I believe this piece is a start but not a perfect product, yet.

I Loved This. Says So Much In Such Simple Words, Like Weakness And Strength. I Love How Vulnerable You Made It Sound And How Open You Truly Are. This Was Just Beautiful. Keep Writhing. 5/5.
-Jessi

To The Poetess: Yea, there are indeed some cheesy lines in this poem, I wrote this poem to convey the meaning of my other poem "The Brighest of the Four" in a much more obvious way. So I decided to use some cheesy lines inorder to make it easier to understand. Thanks for the critic by the way.

To Jenni:
I'm glad you like it. When I wrote it I really wanted to portray a lot of emotion, since that is exactly what I was feeling when I wrote it. The "might" in the first stanza is connected to the "strength" in the second and third. And it refers to the strength required to actually dare tell a friend, whom you love, that you love said person. To express one's feeling towards someone you love is perhaps one of the hardest things to do. At least to me, anyways.

Indeed, I really need to work on keeping the same amount of syllables, and thanks for reminding me.

I think that the title is really interesting because usually divides don't seem to be great, especially since this was in the love section. It definately pulled me in and I think it's an eye-catcher.
The emotions are definately strong throughout the poem and they are touching. I have to admit that I was a bit confused in the first stanza because I did not know what might you were refering to, but maybe that's just me. I'd recommend you to try and keep a similar syllable amount because then the whole poem would flow even better. Overall I actually enjoyed reading this poem because of the message you convey and the touching emotions.

I like poems that rhyme. Though I gotta tell you there were some 'cheesy' lines that I didn't find that much interesting, nevertheless, good write.