I got sucked in.you should keep it up

First of all I'd recommend you to remove those characters because they're just distracting the reader. I actually like the idea behind this poem and the way you presented it. This poem may be short, but yet its message is powerful. I liked the rhyme, but the flow could be a bit better. Overall you might want to edit a few parts, but you definately penned a good poem.

I didn't put in the characters. The website did it somehow...

I like the short sharp straight to the point of this piece. Well done