I feel their is more wanting to be said here but i loved it,,,the flow was a lil off but was still good and a good read,,i did enjoy :)

When the sky holding the rain in his arms

The sweet rain
so warm and lovely
burn out the marks in your heart
-these are the lines i liked most but still i can't put my finger on whats missing or what's really trying to be said but it was good and keep up the good work :)

I agree with the above.
You have the wording down just need to find the flow, fine tune with some editing and find the theme making it clear. Keep it up Talent is blooming