Comments : You fool

  • 12 years ago

    by Darren

    Again Brandy the emotion in this is fantastic, But people will skip over reviewing this because of the form,

    (Taught should be thought)

    I would read it aloud to yourself
    Where you pause, start a new line.
    This will help with the flow.

    This is just my suggestion, but like I said you have done the hard part, just the layout to do.

    keep writing.