Wow i love this poem!!! the wording is perfection! and its so scary! well done 5/5 ^.^

I really enjoyed this!
just my style aswel!

loved the rhyming and wording!
the rhythm isnt perfect i thought, but still all in all amazing!

5/5 from me

Thank you ^.^

I can relate to this. but not in the way where I think it's meant to be related haha. But still, relate none-the-less. beautiful.

This piece has a lot of "secrecy" as well as emotion. I think it is well penned and that you have done a great job. I think that this was well thought because with so few words you have created something amazing. Excellent flow and creative way of integrating the narrator's voice into such a strong piece. I really really like this piece. Fantastic job worthy of a 5 at least

This poem is definately scary. I like the fact that you didn't point out the secret right away, but made the reader curious, which kept pulling me in more.
I think this poem shows that curiousity can get you in all sorts of trouble though this is fiction after all, but sometimes it's still better not to be too curious.

Back to the poem: I enjoyed reading this because the message it conveys is powerful and your words flow well.

I agree with jenni, just seems to draws you in..