Breathe

I take a walk outside
out in the rain
breathe fresh air,
calm the sea's,
the storm within
for inside it's how I feel.

these words are amazing and breathe the deepness of the poem to me

walk and breathe :0) love it and your work I come on just to read what you have written :0)

This one is gud too..5

Wow... I love this!! Such deep emotions were expressed, and I love the way you described these emotions... I love the word choice, though repetitive, it still fit very well. I loved the dark cloud, the rain and the cries... it was a nicely painted poem. Well done! =)

Underneath a constant cloud
gloomy, cold, wet
darkening my skies
for my tears are my cries
always stirring inside
-This shows how much the pain feels. How hurt you are, going in the rain and just letting it out.

I take a walk outside
out in the rain
breathe fresh air,
calm the sea's,
the storm within
for inside it's how I feel.
-I can see the storm happening & you calming down, saying how the storm is an exact replica of your feelings

This poem is full of emotion & hurt. <3 it
5/5