Comments : Pain

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    I will start of with some constructive criticism - when writing a poem it sounds and looks better to use proper words instead of shortened ones. For example you put:
    "Yu used to be da reason i breathed"

    I think it would be better if you put:
    "You use to be the reason I breathed"

    Anyway that said I loved the poem and the emotional content.

    5/5